Traffic Accident
Everybody uses indivudual cars for somebody want to go to anywhere. However, somedrivers don't obey the traffic rules and at the and of this situation, traffic accidents happened. How do we cause the traffic accidents? There are several causes of traffic accident which are a lot of cars in the city, use alcohol, sleeping problems.
The first cause of traffic accidents is that there are a lot of cars in the city. After the work , traffic congestion happened in different places. Drivers lose their concentration and drivers do different types of traffic accidents. If we decrease the number of cars, traffic accidents will not increase in the city.
An other cause of traffic accidents is that drivers use alcohol before driving their cars. according to a survey in a particular area, 35 percent of drivers use the alcohol before driving their cars. Drivers who use alcohol before driving their cars are dangerous factor for other people.
The final cause of traffic accidents is that drivers don't sleep before driving their cars. For instance, a driver doesn't sleep one night ago. Driver drives the car sleepy and after that the driver falls asleep while driving the car. A few minutes later, the driver caused a fatality accident. If the driver doesn't sleep one day ago, the driver wiil not enter the traffic.
All in all, traffic accidents are increasing day by day and a lot of different traffic accidents happening every day. If we don't obey the traffic rules, traffic accidents will be the end our life.
I think you firstly explain general causes and than pass special causes.Your introduction pragraf be special.Your thesis pragraf be good.
YanıtlaSilYou can increase example in second paragraf.What happen when use alcohol?You explain result of using alcohol. You use identical reason to thirt and fourt paragraf.I think you use different reason.Your concludind paragraf be disconnected from each other.
your introduction is not well developed. you are talking about not obeying the rules as the cause of accidents. this is too detailed. traffic congestion happened ?? what does this mean?
YanıtlaSilnot do accident but have accident
ın your sencond body paragraph, you talk about alcohol, but very shortly. how does using alcohol cause traffic accidents? try to explain the behaviors associated with alcohol.
ın your third body, how does being sleepy cause traffic accidents?
ın your conclusion paragraph, you also didnt mention the causes mentioned above. try to talk about them too.